I just set aside a novel called Betrayal by Mayandree Michel. It was supposed to be a Greek mythology tie-in, but I never got that far. The writing was just so awkward. Long sentences, misuse of commas and apostrophes, disagreement in lists--like, "sightseers toured mansions, saloons, and rode the train." Plus problems in logic, pacing, tone. The narration repeated facts that had just been stated a page earlier, made a big deal about how long something would take then said "it took all of five minutes" (when irony/humor was not the point), and called the climate in Nevada "dry and sticky." I guess I don't know about the last one personally, but usually when people describe climates they're "hot, humid, and sticky" or "hot, dry, something really bad about how dry it is." You don't usually hear "dry and sticky" together. The lead character lives in Nevada and she wants to go to college someplace with a different climate, so she takes her college applications for Texas and Arizona out of her desk drawer and throws them away... why did she even have applications for those states to begin with? Plus, the dialogue doesn't sound like what people actually say. The lead character's mom says, "Some stew wouldn't hurt your slim frame." That is not a direct quote in casual conversation from anyone, ever.
Looking at the reviews on Amazon, I see the book was self-published, and most people agree the grammar was awful and that it could use a good editing!
It reads like it was written by someone who always got B-pluses in high school English, and everyone is always telling them they're "such a great writer"--which really just means they love to write, they can write a LOT, they're a pleasant person, they can spell (or at least use spellcheck), and they have ambition. Like, they're a better writer than most of the kids in their class and moreover, they want to write, so yeah, they're a "great writer." And they took that to heart and poured out this 660 page novel, the first in a series, and somehow never encountered anyone who said, "Actually, having a LOT of words doesn't actually mean it's GOOD." Which I guess is easier to avoid if you self-publish. And apparently neither they nor any friends who read the story have ever read anything well-written before.